Chapter nine + ten
Dani and Alex leave the band, because it doesn't work anymore ...
Joe and Pete drink lots of alcohol and get racist !
Dani and Alex leave Australia and move to England, where they have a new band, which calls 'The Dolphins'.
Now Alex hasn't to decide between Dani and the university.
2 Kommentare:
If you ask me I'm impressed by your mini saga. You shorted two hole chapters in to just 50 words. If I hadn't read both chapters I would understand the ending without problems!
I just have one question: What exactly do you mean with "rastic"? Do you mean "racist"?
PS: I love you & we already have your christmas present!
In my opinion your mini saga is succesful! You understood everthing, could write it down for other in an understandable way and another important aspect I think: your text doesn't sound like all the others, great style! And of cause the tense is the right! But now the "but"... if you ask my, sometimes you could use other beginnings of the sentences.. but it isn't bad ( im Sinne von schlimm).
<3 , prillii
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